My heart takes flight, into the dusky sky,
My gestures don't say it, but I want to comply.
Be my friend, I can't stay apart
For I am afraid,
Thy love is thy art.
For I am afraid,
Thy love is thy art.
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- Ayushi
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- Little Moments Of Bliss is a silhouette of a feeling that resides in my heart. A software engineer by degree, a writer at heart, and a teacher by profession, I'm all that I never thought I would be. Pretty pictures,a poem that blatantly refuses to rhyme, a text from a deranged friend, a sudden gesture of love, its these little things in life, that matter and sprinkle bliss. Grace the couch and share a cuppa!
And your first attempt is very good, I must say! :)
ReplyDeleteHard to believe so ;) but Thank You Ruhani :)
DeleteI smiled after reading this :)
ReplyDeleteThat is one thing I always aim with precision :)
DeleteFirst attempt? Wow. It doesn't seem like it. :)
ReplyDeleteIts short and yet, encompasses the feeling of falling in love (helplessly..?!). Great attempt.
A long poem from my pen would have made you run off my blog forever :D
DeleteThank You ES :)
Nice! Undoubtedly a classic attempt at short poem. I love the short poems because they convey more in less. :)
ReplyDeleteKeep going.. once poetry touches you.. you tend to see more in little things.
:)
More in less, that is exactly what I love about poetry :)
DeleteAlthough for me, it takes almost twice as much time in composing poems than what it takes in writing prose ;)
this is a first attempt? wow.. I must say this was good :)
ReplyDelete:D You're modest :)
DeleteNice, cute, delightful work.
ReplyDeletethat was cute! very Shakespearean..with the"thy's" !!
ReplyDelete:D I flirted with poetry.
DeleteEXCELLENT POEM ! Apt; and so greatly crafted words.
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Thanks aj :)
Deletesimple short and sweet!!
ReplyDeleteThank you Shilpi :)
DeleteGenuinely I did love it :) I was nervous posting poetry at first but I got better at it.
ReplyDeleteI wish I do too :)
DeleteThe 'smooth' art of....is that what you meant? Yes, the apprehension and subsequently the fear, both are expressed very well. Distinct...confidently worded.
ReplyDeleteSo, next poem? :)
haha, I doubt ;)
DeleteThey seldom come easy to me ;)
1st attempt is like too good...cute u know...i actually smiled in the end...liked it...:)
ReplyDelete:) seriously ? you did ?
DeleteSweet!
ReplyDelete:)
Deletesweet one
ReplyDeleteThank You B :)
DeleteReally nice...since this is your first one...sure you'll delight us with lots more in future. Keep it up!
ReplyDeletehope so :)
Delete<3 <3 loved it!
ReplyDeletehaha :D seriously ? I was just going to text you and ask you to review this ;)
Delete"Thy love is thy art" - that's such a wonderful thought! :) The idea of being artful in love isn't often brought up. And I love that photograph that goes along with it, too. Evokes endless lazy summer afternoons spent with the one you love.
ReplyDeleteYou described it much more beautifully than what I had in mind ;)
DeleteThank You so much for that :)
lovely poem
ReplyDeletewill wait for the next one
Thank You Chirag :)
Deletelovely poem
ReplyDeleteNice! It really does not come across as your first attempt at it! Keep them coming!
ReplyDeleteHope so Upasana :)
Deletelovely poem...
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Glad :)
Deletenever appeared to me as your first attempt...nice one... :)
ReplyDeleteThank You Sarab :)
DeleteYou struck gold in the first attempt! Keep writing:)
ReplyDeleteSeriously Rahul sir ? ;)
DeleteBeautiful. I haven't been reading a few of your recent posts like before, and I tell you this made me regret!
ReplyDeleteBeautiful. And that is no overstatement.
- R.R
:) catch up on the rest soon, Ill be waiting to hear from you on the rest :)
Deletesweet...beautiful
ReplyDeleteThank you varsha :)
ReplyDeleteBeautiful poem. Doesn't seem like this is your first attempt at all. :)
ReplyDeletevery generous of you ;)
Deleteshort & sweeet...
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Thank You chitra :)
Deleteshort sweet
ReplyDeleteFill the glass of life with the wine of love to find peace and eternity of life:-)
ReplyDeletecan never stay part from life or love
cheers
Thank You Sushma :)
DeleteQuite short...but cutee..:)
ReplyDeletewanted it to be :)
DeleteAre you serious? I mean this is your first attempt at writing a poem? Hard to believe.....
ReplyDeleteI have a friend who writes amazing short poems. And she is not a newbie.... ( I hardly lie :) )
You reminded me of her thru this poem....
Superb work. Keep writing and keep getting better.
Seriously ? You're so kind :)
DeletePass me the link to your friend's work ;)
cute cute.!
ReplyDelete:):)
Deletewhich is exactly why I love you :)
ReplyDeletehey! this is my first visit to your blog and this was so obviously the first post i read.
ReplyDeleteso when i saw the line at the end saying this was your first poem, i was truly surprised!!
this is so simple and touching :)
i love the subtle touch to your rhymes. this is so heartfelt :)
so glad to have found your blog.
cheers!
Thank You for such lovely words Kirti :)
DeleteI still can't believe I wrote this poem :P
I'm a closet poet and gotta say, this is pretty good. you might just have a secret talent there.
ReplyDeleteThank You :)
DeleteI'm not a good judge of poetry. Never got the hang of those rhyming words really. (Gave me nightmares in school, you know)
ReplyDeleteBut I liked the sound of words. Very lovely indeed. Especially, "thy love is thy art" :)
Thank You Karthik :)
Deletea lot of times , people write pages and pages of what they call poetry and there are these few gems who write a verse and that verse speaks volumes about the writer. and this stands true in your case.
ReplyDeleteand i also read the last post. amazing and well i want to add more adjectives and tell you how much i loved it but the topic and the visualization of all those scenes makes me feel puckish..!
if you get up to change the world you will be changed.and this is so true in INDIA.
well if ministers can say that jeans arouses men to rape. what better can you hope for?
and i missed you and your posts. :)
Thank You Suvi :)
Delete'I am She' is a post very close to my heart. I'm so glad you related with it.
Grt Blog!!
ReplyDeleteI don't know of a better first attempt. :-*
ReplyDeleteAnd only yesterday I was telling a blogger friend about how love is such an over talked and yet under expressed theme when it comes to literature. I love how you did justice with it =)
You're right. Love is under rated here Crys. Only if more people knew better :)
ReplyDeleteIf this is your first try at poetry, i wonder how great will your poems be when you master the art. Awesome poem
ReplyDeletechked ur blog twice in a day..itz so very sweet i must say.. :) nd btw this poem of urs is soo awesome.. keep writing more !!
ReplyDeletenice poem
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