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January 17, 2012

The Forbidden Fruit [55Fiction #2]



He stumbles in, every friday, makes passionate love to me, lusts my body, and then leaves his money staring at my bare essence.

Love they say, is a happy emotion, takes you high on beatitude. Supreme Blessedness.

Just the sight of him sets my heart racing inside my chest. Then why is my love illegitimate ? 

55 comments:

  1. Probably because she loves him, he loves her not. He comes only for her body, it's his guilty pleasure, and because she loves him secretly, she gives him the best.

    Nice post.

    Cheers,
    Blasphemous Aesthete

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    1. BA -

      She does give him the best. Merely for that little hint of hope that he might love her back someday.

      Thank You :)

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  2. Deeply moved. The pic is so apt compliments the 55fic. Love is never illegitimate. Well written. Crisp.

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    1. Sam -


      Coming from you, means a lot :)
      Thank You :) and heartiest congratulations for getting engaged :)

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  3. Deeply moved. The pic compliments the 55fic. Love- can it ever be illegitimate? Well written Serendipity!:)

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  4. Great fan of 55 Fiction. And this is so intriguing. :))

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  5. These are the rules set by society...He comes back which means something is kindling inside him for her...

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    1. Saru Di -

      Maybe its his desire for her body. Thank You for reading :)

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  6. shortest from you(i guess) yet strongest !
    well said in 55 !-DeepaK

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    1. Deepak -

      Indeed the shortest. Thank You :)

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  7. Truly a forbidden fruit! Very well written!

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  8. Just saw this on IndiBlogger. WOW. I wish I could write even half as good as this.
    This is sharp and made me think.
    I don't think her love is "illegitimate" .. She can love whomever she wants yeah? And we should understand that people have their own reasons for doing what they do.
    And a prostitute too,in the end, is a lady, a human being.
    Awesomeness this is!
    <3
    xo

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    1. Nirati -

      You do write good sweetie :)
      You haven't been around for a while. what's keeping you so busy ?

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    2. Ah. Foot is still not fine. Can't really walk properly.
      Gave re-exams 2 weeks ago, and got exams coming up again in about 10 days.
      Le sigh.

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  9. Dark and vivid !! You say a thousand words through 2 lines!! Amazing craft :)

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  10. Kehar!! 55 words were never this profound....

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  11. This blew my mind. I think I'll borrow a leaf and start quoting instead of full blown stories . Please dont mind ?

    Agree with the above comment. Muah!

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    1. Megh -

      I like it when you appreciate :P And yes please, you already do so well with quotes, take them up asap :)
      I remember your statuses from facebook :)

      Mwah :*

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  12. Crisp and forceful. It is termed illegitimate coz it does not follow the norms set by the society.

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  13. Good piece. I have always found '55 words' posts very interesting. And your's was no less. :)

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  14. 55 fiction..something i can never do.. But this is super awesome man :D

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    1. CS -
      I thought the same a few weeks back but I did it finally :)
      Give it a try and thank You :)

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  15. Volumes in 55 words. Bravo!

    keep it goin ;)

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  16. This one reminds me of Coelho's 11 minutes...wherein protagonist practices sacred prostitution...you speak a ton in 55 words!!

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    1. alphaqsecc -

      I've read 11 minutes. It was nowhere near my mind when I wrote this, but yes, the similarity is striking ;)
      Thank You :)

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  17. Nicely put; the emotions...!!

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  18. Excellent! emotions.. words.. everything just excellent!

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  19. You've written this with so much depth that I read it once, I realize that I've nt understood the whole thing and then I read it again and again until I realized that I can never reach to the bottom.
    If it's love, it can never be illegitimate.
    Haven't you given the proof to his love for her in these lines itself? It's just that he/we being the social being don't see/accept that as love.

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Scribble some love !