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Little Moments Of Bliss is a silhouette of a feeling that resides in my heart. A software engineer by degree, a writer at heart, and a teacher by profession, I'm all that I never thought I would be. Pretty pictures,a poem that blatantly refuses to rhyme, a text from a deranged friend, a sudden gesture of love, its these little things in life, that matter and sprinkle bliss. Grace the couch and share a cuppa!

November 7, 2011

Irrevocable Words [55Fiction #1]




Though every syllable felt like a lie, he knew he had to come clean. She knew too. It was now or never. The words finally stung her, loud and clear, 'We should be friends now'.
A warm tear trickled down and she thought ,Everytime you walk away, you take a piece of me with you.
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29 comments:

  1. Writing BeeNovember 7, 2011 at 4:42 AM

    I am feeling the exact same pain now!! And he has taken away the entire me with me!!

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  2. AnonymousNovember 7, 2011 at 5:24 AM

    :) 55fiction can be tricky...

    well done :)

    ps: i like the signature..

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  3. CяystalNovember 7, 2011 at 6:09 AM

    You know what, I love you. Oh, you already know that, and I love this piece. Reminded me of the lines from Avril's song, "When you walk away, I count the steps that you take" for some awkward reason.
    and i love the line in italics. Exactly my sentiments.

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  4. RahulNovember 7, 2011 at 7:27 AM

    superb!!as usual!!

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  5. suvaibaNovember 7, 2011 at 7:41 AM

    hey,
    the last line was heart touching....! and if i am to guess heart wrenching for the protagonist .
    i wonder how can you summarize A BIG BANG STORY in just 55 words..!
    appreciations..!~

    hope you managed to get over the parting feeling with your BFF

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  6. Shagun OhriNovember 7, 2011 at 7:54 AM

    So little, means so much!
    It's amazing how we give a single person so much of ourselves, only to feel broken in the end!

    Well written. Thanks for the follow :)

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  7. Saru SinghalNovember 7, 2011 at 9:11 AM

    Painful but I love the last line. Simply amazing...:)

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  8. AyushiNovember 7, 2011 at 9:32 AM

    Deepthi :
    I'm sorry to hear that Deepthi. I didn't know you were going through this pain. I'm sorry for unintentionally I reminded you of him.

    Chintan :
    It definitely is tricky Chintan, You have to count the words everytime you edit your text. But Thank You :)

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  9. AyushiNovember 7, 2011 at 9:49 AM

    Cяystal :
    How I dwell and love the fact that you love me :):)

    Rahul :
    Thank You :)

    Suvaiba :
    Thats what attracted me towards 55Fiction Suvaiba :) My mom met my ex-bff today, she was as happy as I am now. Life's good :)

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  10. AyushiNovember 7, 2011 at 10:07 AM

    Shagun :
    Thank You so much Shagun :)
    Welcome to my blog :)

    Saru Di :
    Thank You :)

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  11. PriNovember 7, 2011 at 8:18 PM

    one of the world's toughest decisions---better friends or bitter lovers?

    i loved the way you managed to say so much in just 55 words...

    kudos!!!

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  12. monamourNovember 7, 2011 at 8:40 PM

    oh so sad! :/

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  13. Rahul BhatiaNovember 8, 2011 at 2:34 AM

    The last bit was just wonderful!

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  14. Nirati November 8, 2011 at 4:28 AM

    Whoa! You put it up really nicely, in 55 words!
    Touched my heart :)
    xx

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  15. AakritiNovember 8, 2011 at 9:55 AM

    First crystal ..then u...breath taking words and their impact..wonderful indeed..beautiful Ayu:*

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  16. Sh@sNovember 8, 2011 at 11:16 AM

    Good one.

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  17. Nikita Vhora (Nequesta)November 9, 2011 at 3:00 AM

    Love the way that beautiful last line sums it all up! :)

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  18. SuKupedia ™ :) :)November 9, 2011 at 3:12 AM

    the last line was so beautiful.. touching.. :) :)

    noticed your signature.. new na.. very nice :) :)

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  19. Writing BeeNovember 9, 2011 at 3:34 AM

    That's ok!!Truth hurts!! But I should mention I find a lot of peace and serenity when I come back from class, sitting infront of my lap reading beautiful posts of such beautiful people :)

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  20. CяystalNovember 9, 2011 at 11:39 PM

    Where are you? Are you okaaay ? Drop a mail sometime.

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  21. CookieCrumbsInc.November 11, 2011 at 5:37 AM

    You let some one in so much that they become a part of you... when they leave, you lose that part - such a scary thought.

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  22. AyushiNovember 11, 2011 at 5:40 AM

    Pri -
    Welcome to my blog :) and thank you so much Pri :)

    N.I.O. -
    Indeed it is.

    Rahul -
    Thank You :)

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  23. AyushiNovember 11, 2011 at 5:43 AM

    Blahblaholic -
    Thank You N :) Means a lot :)

    Aakriti -
    Thank You aakriti, You're a sweetheart :)

    Sh@s -
    Thank You :)

    Nikita -
    Welcome to my blog Nikita and thank you so much :)

    Sukupedia -
    Did I ever mention I love you ? ;) Nonetheless, now I'm confessing :) and yes, the signature is new :)

    Deepthi -
    That touched my heart Deepthi :)

    Crystal -
    Never been good sweetheart :)

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  24. SameeraNovember 13, 2011 at 6:35 PM

    :) Nice!! Just 55 words is all we need to say what needs to be said. I myself had picked this idea up from another blogger. Nice to know you liked the idea too! Cheers to 55 fiction!

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  25. AyushiNovember 14, 2011 at 12:16 AM

    Cheers to 55 Fiction :)

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  26. phaticharJanuary 18, 2012 at 10:09 PM

    Lovely. :)

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  27. VinzJanuary 24, 2012 at 1:05 AM

    Nice one...!!

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